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The Plan, My first time at fanfic ^_^;;;;
harutenshi
post Apr 5 2004, 02:57 PM
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Hi everyone! This is my first attempt at fan fic! Don't be surprised if it's not great! ^_^

Chapter 1

"Now remember our plan Edison," a shadowy figure said.
"Yeah, yeah" Edison said as he stomped off. Why did I ever join the gang? he wondered as he scouted for a specific person. Lunch was already starting and most of the students were at their lockers getting their lunch. His spikey black hair glimmered as he walked down the hall. He was a tall, fairly built seventeen year old with milk chocolate eyes. He spotted the person he had been looking for and walked towards her. Mercedes Chang. She was a senior like Edison. She was a little bit popular, but everyone loved her. She was five feet nine inches, with long dark brown hair with blonde highlights. She was always up on the latest fashion and always wore expensive clothing.
"Hello" Edison said, giving his smile all the girls swooned over.
"Oh! Hi, what a surprise seeing you near my locker." she replied, as she closed her locker with lunch money in her hands.
"Well it's never to late to make new friends!" he laughed. She giggled along with him.
"So, may I walk you to lunch?"
"Sure!" All of a sudden Edison grabbed her two arms and put them in hand cuffs. He picked her up and ran with her in his muscline arms.
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post Apr 16 2004, 08:29 PM
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Chang is a magical person! Thats why he/she has a Mercedes Car...Wooooo! It must be rich and powerful!!! embarassedlaugh.gif embarassedlaugh.gif embarassedlaugh.gif embarassedlaugh.gif embarassedlaugh.gif .

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post Apr 16 2004, 08:53 PM
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nice stroy so far haru good work beerchug.gif
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post Apr 17 2004, 08:14 AM
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Thanks Jun! ^^ I didn't think it was good, typed it over spring break in a few minutes. embarassedlaugh.gif I'll think of more later. Thanks again Jun! ^^
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post Apr 17 2004, 02:05 PM
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Ooo boi! Where Edison going with that Chang girl..oo boi! Gawsh, where's the next part?!?!? I wanna find out!!! biggthumpup.gif Nicely done harutenshi.
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post Apr 17 2004, 02:41 PM
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Thanks AzNgIrL! I'll try to write the next part a.s.a.p.!
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post Apr 17 2004, 03:18 PM
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Great! I can't wait to see this next part. Any hint for us on what's gonna happen? icon_smile.gif
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post Apr 17 2004, 03:35 PM
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Hehe, thanks. Well Mercedes is going to be taken to a secret location. Hehe, still coming up with it icon_wink.gif
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post Apr 17 2004, 03:39 PM
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Ooo! What is Edison gonna do to her?!?!? C'mon you can't keep us waiting!!
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post Apr 17 2004, 04:08 PM
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"Let go of me you scum!" screamed Mercedes as she kicked Edison's thighs. Edison dropped Mercedes on the sizzling pavement of the school parking lot. He took out a thick rope and tied her legs together. He took out another piece of rope and tied her arms together. He picked her up again and walked to the 2003 Toyota Celica and opened up the trunk and put her in it. He gave her an evil smile. She spit at his right eye.
"Am I supposed to be intimitated by that?" Edison sneared.
"Bite me," she shouted. Edison punched her across the face, knocking her out.
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Mercedes opened her eyes. She was in a small elegant room. This has to be dream she thought. She shut her eyes tightly and opened them. This has to be a nightmare!
"I see your awake," Edison said as he walked to her. He walked to her and ran his finger along the side of soft face. She bit his finger as it touched the side of her mouth. "You little!" He slapped her, making her fall down on her back along with the chair. He took out a black long gun and held it right at her face. Her eyes widened as she saw his hand on the trigger. "That's what I thought," as he put away the gun.
"What do you want from me anyways?" she snapped forgetting the incident.
"I heard that you're family has a been making sneaky deals with the gang Silver Dragons."
"I have no idea what you're talking about. My family is very honest people and they would never do that."
"Fine. We can keep at this all day you know," Mercedes didn't know what to think of. She lied to him. She did know her family did make illegal trades and black mailed, but it was not to be spoken about. Not even with her family. "But there's somebody very special I'd like you to take a look at. Edison pulled the crimson drapes and behind the drapes was a tanned guy with blonde hair.
"Brian!" Mercedes screamed. Brian was a friend closest to Mercedes. She could always relay on him. He was her childhood friend. The best friend who always stuck with her through thick and thin. Mercedes started crying. How could she let this happen to her best friend.
"Say goodbye to Brian!" laughed Edison as he pulled out the black gun.
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post Apr 18 2004, 03:05 PM
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Ouch..Mercedes sure isn't afraid...Wow..this is intense...When do you think you'll have next part ready? Lol, you always stop it when it's getting to the best part! cry2.gif
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post Apr 18 2004, 03:12 PM
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Probably over the weekend I may have another one icon_smile.gif I'll try not to stop at the best parts. icon_wink.gif
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post Apr 18 2004, 03:43 PM
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cool30.gif very interesting
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post Apr 18 2004, 04:56 PM
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QUOTE (harutenshi @ Apr 18 2004, 05:12 PM)
Probably over the weekend I may have another one icon_smile.gif I'll try not to stop at the best parts. icon_wink.gif

Lol, you make it so hard! Lol, I like how this is going. It's sooo interesting! I wanna see what happens! Thank you! I love reading this..Mercedes..poor Mercedes...
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post Apr 18 2004, 05:05 PM
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Hehe, thanks. I'll try to think about it during the week. I hope my brain isn't fried out cause I have standerized testing next week for the whole week.
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post Apr 18 2004, 05:57 PM
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Oooo boi..Good Luck. No need to rush. Take your time icon_smile.gif
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post Apr 21 2004, 02:13 AM
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silver dragons was the name of a triad branch in my triad story sure.gif
haha nice story so far keep up the good work biggthumpup.gif

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post Apr 21 2004, 01:16 PM
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Thanks AzNgIrL. Jun I'm sorry I took the silver dragons!! Sorry!! Sorry!! I'll change it later! Thanks though ^.^
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post Apr 21 2004, 11:44 PM
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^ nah don't change it, there is no reason to icon_smile.gif
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