These are some rough draft pictures I have drawn some months ago. They aren't that neat but tell me what you think.

Try not to put that many pencil marks on the second one, it's like" i cant see the face" kinda thing
But it's nice, overall.

for a rought draft it's good. but for your final try to be more accurate with your pencil.

Thats good, most people cant draw nose's adn there for mess the whole pic up. Better than anything i can do..

For me to draw nose, i would use the anime way

i like the first one!

I'm going to leave the first picture alone because I am lazy. But as for the second picture, the shading on the face is nice enough, but it would be about a million times more impact-ful *haha...* if you inked the whole picture, and THEN applied the shading with screentone *but who can afford that? :P*

Here's a big tip, USE guide lines, the person looks like he's slanting at an un-natural angle, making it painfully obvious that you are not a professional (and there is nothing wrong with that). Just draw a line extending from the head to the body *like an enlongated spine* and make sure to keep everything straight or crooked to the extent that it is still believable. The shoulders, are sloping too much, you probably want to use a reference picture or look in the mirror to see how normal shoulders behave.

Make the neck a bit thinner *like 1 mm* If you want to redo the picture, make sure that the hair looks sharper *use more lines if you want detail*arrang the lines nicely however*, but use less lines of you want to define a solid and defenite shape for the hair*

The shading on the hair is toooo dark, its like he has an incomplete bleach job, just erase the shading a bit.

If you want to redo the picture, I suggest you using a light box and copy over the picture using a mechanical pencil (.05 works best) or just redo the picture in .05 so it looks cleaner and less "rough." Happy drawing!

the guys suppose to be slanted. That's how he's standing.

Well, I cant really tell that from the picture, and he'd fall if he was standing like that.

Bwah, anything is possible when you make it up in a comic. Superman can't really fly but whose complaining.

the 1st one .looks familiar ..hanamichi? cool drawing s

Alright, I'll be blunt, it looks BAD like that. But who am I to judge?

i like it, i can't draw that good

practice more ...you will be ....

first pic is good
second pic is also well done except one thing:
the shoulders seems to be too feminine in my taste but if that's wot u intended for character to be like, its all good. I would straighten the shoulders up a bit more since its a teenage guy that u are drawing here not a lil kid though maybe its the trend now these days to depict male anime characters with femine traits.

thx for the advice

Nah, it's not a teenager, it's a man. I tend to unconsciously draw my personal ideal man whenever I draw a manga.

I don't think I've ever made a manga about kids or teens.

I wanna post my roughdraft too, but i am not done yet, i will post it p later, but it's anime version of me and my "future" Af gf, hahahaha, just so you know