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NINDOX
Let's Talk (Free Verse 5)

This is dedicated to someone I would like to talk to, or like to talk more often to.

Your lips pressed, as you lock your teeth; a doubled locked cell.
Keeping in that voice, like it didn't had a choice.
Your mind's cluttered, leaving thoughts to loiter.
Take a deep breath, cause doing this will only get you depressed.
Perhaps not saying, can lead to regrets.

I say hi, but your mind is trying to regress.
Sitting at a table, we can discuss more than cable.
Screw television; tell me what's your vision.
What kind of dreams that you want to be livin' in?
Or something else that could be happenin'.

Perhaps your mind thinking these sentences will never have happy ends.
Fear of tongue lashin', critical retorts unwilling to support the thoughts you be harboring.
I'm no judge; even I sometimes say stupid things.
Left other people wondering, is his mind in sync?
Sometimes is better that we just let people think who we are, as we let them know who we are.

Though we are seated, you think this discussion will become heated.
But there's no pressure, so please rest reassure.
So let's converse, like I'm writing a verse.
You don't have to rehearse before your words disperse.
Just let the words go, even though it might not flow sensibly, we can still move on to next.

Perhaps we should just go for a walk, and then talk.
Let the words flow, and then the conversation go as we go.
Subjects don't have to be to complex, like text written in syntax.
Instead of thinking of what's next, just let our voices step.
Ideas don't need to be too perplexed in order for it to be meaningful.

Though, it might be interesting that you could make my mind convexed with strange arithmetic equations.
I wouldn't mind to find the humor in your lines.
The depth of your sentences that run deeper than valleys.
Or even what you saw in a gallery, the alley, or anything that could have caught you eye.
More importantly, what you're feeling and is your life going well?

If you're here thinkin' I'm callin' you out.
This is just a little shout out, for that light voice of yours to come out.
Even if this does get you a little angry, you could come up and shout at me.
Because more importantly, the point of this verse
Was for you to talk to me.

Lets talk.
wolfblade
two thumbs up, i really like it
felltohell
like a dew drop hanging on a branch
when the sun crosses the sky,
i fall off after shinning once...
NINDOX
QUOTE(felltohell @ Mar 8 2008, 04:26 AM) [snapback]3552382[/snapback]
like a dew drop hanging on a branch
when the sun crosses the sky,
i fall off after shinning once...


Is this acknowledgment or that this is lacking?
felltohell
oh that's just a li'l something something i thought of...wanted to write it down...
hehe
NINDOX
QUOTE(felltohell @ Mar 9 2008, 04:59 AM) [snapback]3554429[/snapback]
oh that's just a li'l something something i thought of...wanted to write it down...
hehe


oh... shifty.gif
felltohell
^ ei nindox lemme share one of the things a poet must keep in mind...

"show, don't tell"

hope this helps...
the trend in contemporary poetry is on the use of images...
babelone
23:50 But in the meantime maybe we
Could dance as long as rhythm's free
With shameless insincerity
As if we truly cared

For now we've played our best charades
And traded in our hearts for spades
At least at last our cards are laid
Upon the table bare

Tonight we'll shelter from this storm
And try to make each other warm
Tomorrow we'll regain our form
And part with our despair

But buy another cask of wine
And promise me that you'll be mine
And maybe in our lust we'll find
Some love that we can share

- Copyright, Sean Moran 1997.
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Nouveau
i love reading your poems....miss them..... beerchug.gif i mean i love your style of sentence structure, choice of words...and how smoothly the setting within the poems gives subtle sense of ourself being in it.........i can feel what the person in the poem feels ..........the mood of the poem .............ect........... biggthumpup.gif "NINDOX"

NINDOX
QUOTE(Nouveau @ Aug 21 2008, 09:42 PM) [snapback]3885339[/snapback]
i love reading your poems....miss them..... beerchug.gif i mean i love your style of sentence structure, choice of words...and how smoothly the setting within the poems gives subtle sense of ourself being in it.........i can feel what the person in the poem feels ..........the mood of the poem .............ect........... biggthumpup.gif "NINDOX"


Thanks, I'm surprise you pulled this out. I haven't written in a while.
felltohell
nindox keep this one alive...
when i feel like translating, haha i'll show some to you..

this one i wrote about the dewdrop:
like a dew drop hanging on a branch
when the sun crosses the sky,
i fall off after shinning once...

this one's actually about life..
it is about how each and everyone's life is like a dewdrop on a branch...
we're all destined to fall off from the branch that we cling onto..
it is in shining that we fall anf die
herb
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NINDOX
QUOTE(felltohell @ Sep 18 2008, 10:50 PM) [snapback]3928722[/snapback]
nindox keep this one alive...
when i feel like translating, haha i'll show some to you..

this one i wrote about the dewdrop:
like a dew drop hanging on a branch
when the sun crosses the sky,
i fall off after shinning once...

this one's actually about life..
it is about how each and everyone's life is like a dewdrop on a branch...
we're all destined to fall off from the branch that we cling onto..
it is in shining that we fall anf die


*nods nods* I feel bad, that I haven't written anything in a while though.

QUOTE(herb @ Sep 19 2008, 07:02 PM) [snapback]3929919[/snapback]
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Thanks
felltohell
it's right that you do whip.gif

but i feel even worse for not translating tha text and sharing it to you.. haha
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but will do..just taking my time..
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