An attractive woman in walked down the street. Her long blond hair bobbed down the sides of her partially exposed cleavage. She wondered if she had worn appropriate attire. Perhaps this was too much of a mismatch given the weather, but she liked to feel sexy on special occasions and this was definitely a special occasion. Since she had no jacket, she pulled her small black duffel bag closer to her.

She looked behind twice... There were no footsteps behind. This was the second time she'd stopped to make sure.... No one was around.. The streetlight flickered. Was it her imagination? She couldn't tell. Sometimes shadows played tricks with her. The chill winter air sent goosebumps up and down her arm and she quickened her pace. Nights like this were always foreboding.

The honking of cars in the distance and bustle of the street were muted in the distance as her footsteps drew quicker and closer to her destination. Soon she'd reach the apartment; she thought of it with some degree of excitement. Nightfall had come quickly. Darkness was quickly gaining momentum and cloaking first the walkway, then the overhangs, then stairwell making it almost unseeable and her motions undetectable. She needed to move faster.

She briefly glanced upwards at the windows of the small neat buildings she passed by. The first house was where the elderly couple lived. They always went to bed before the evening news. They had a comfortable existence, probably microwave meals in front of re-runs of some 60s television nostalgia or qvc. Their movements were like clockwork. She had watched them closely. They never deviated from the mundane routine. The second house was recently sold. The owners won the lottery or inherited a fortune, they were long gone out of this neighborhood. That was no surprise. Most people who fell into even a bit of money got out of this place. The streets were pretty empty. It was not that a lot of crime occurred here as far as the news reports had to tell. But there were stories that went around town, which were enough to make anyone new suspicious of rapists and other waywards. She was glad she had made preparations. She new this street well. She didn't feel afraid of anything. No voyeurs.... The third house... ... this was the house.

Silently she reached the door, she listened for any sounds out of the ordinary. It was a very late hour.. Not even owls were hunting. The neighbors had most likely gone to bed. The diehard party-ers should have passed out by now from their drunkness, which is what she was counting on. Hardly any one on this street on this night would be awake. He would probably be passed out. He was like clockwork too.

It was exactly as she expected. The lights were out and a empty bottle sat at the top of the window sill. The makers of Everclear had definitely improved her business. Her slender hand touched the knob. She fidgeted with the lock for a second, but the door was jammed shut. The curtains were only partially drawn. For a moment, she paused. She wondered if this was a problem. But she had already come this far.... She'd just have to close them once she got in to keep out intrusive eyes. She had prepared for this. She dug in her purse. She removed the file. It stuck. Finally, she got in and crept in the shadows up the stairs soundlessly.

When she got to his room, she stood over him. His soft flannel pajamas partially covered his spiderman drawers.

Perfect. Passed out in the darkness. Inebriated. Helpless. Defenseless. She took out the duct tape from her bag. There would be no struggle. She descended upon him.... She smiled. It was hard to find victims these days. Virginity was being sold on the internet and it was a hard commodity to find. But she liked to get hers for free. His body lay quivering. He was innocent no more!


THE END.

You have issues cloudyski.

My story is well written

Disgusting... You sicken me .......

...

?!?!?!?!????????

I am appalled and offended.

are you serious?

Just awful.

$hit English.

This is shocking!

No, it is not.



This is the first time I agreed with him.

lol... that is a bad sign


it was supposed to be a surprise twist!

she is the rapist not the rapee aka victim

i thought this was a short story section. how come all these negative reviews?

is the subject matter too macabre?

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usually u guys have a sense of humor


at least jake is with me and gets it

um.........what a wonderful bedtime story to tell little kids.

Oh it must be the subject matter. It couldn't possibly be the lack of fluidity or the $hit English

This "story" is the daily lifestyle of cloudyski haha.

And all this time I thought I was the weird one here!


btw its kinky
If your game Im game!

that's the spirit



.... ya right Takashi, like you'd be a good judge of english








kinky is better than gasps of shock!

Given that I'm not an imbecile like you, yes I am a good judge
I'm not the only one that noticed it either.
When you're wrong try to better yourself instead of acting like a twat

i want to slap you in the face *SLAP* *SLAP*


i am not an imbecile you turd

et tu tissue box?

wow.....
thats scary....
BJJ ftw.

Personally, I liked the twist. Well not liked it, but you know.

...it was different.

story itself has a nice irnoic twist but to be honest the writing was sloppy(no offense)

i was going for free style

:-O


like train of thought

oooo ok. Good twist, improve ur writing style though.

I think the story itself was good, however, I would have chose a better title. It gives the whole story away.

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA

It succeeds in that respect, because it turns the tables on the commonly accepted "male as rapist scenario".

omg im so turned on now

LMBO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

O MY GAWSH.

I haven't even read past the title and I'm already laughing out loud.
When you think of fanfic you don't think of rape and stuff.... and knowing it's from someone like you lol.. I bet it's going to be a really different kind of fanfic.

lol, wait wait I'm gonna add a rape story too


The L.A. Korean gang rape

Fivers was walking down the streets in downtown L.A.
It was hot and humid which was quite normal for this time of the year namely somewhere mid-july. Fivers was getting thirsty and a bit exhausted also as she had been inline-skating nearly all afternoon and early evening. She looked at her watch and noticed it was already 9:00PM, which only left her two hours before having to head back to the motel where she stayed with a couple of friends Elena and Joelle she had met the day before. They had been on a trip to Mexico and had been sleeping all day in the motel asking Fivers to be back at 11:00PM so they could hit the Hardrock Hotel afterwards together in order to meet Joelle's sister - a bartender at the Rehab Hardrock Hotel. (lol)
The plan was to ask Joelle's sister if there were any open cocktail waitress vacancies left for the season so that Fivers could have her first experience as a Rehab Hardrock Hotel member crew, a summer job she had been dreaming of all year long and that would eventually come true if only she would be there on time that evening at the Hardrock Hotel.

If only...
Now that Fivers had been looking at her watch, she knew there was not much time left to get a drink and head back to the motel where her friends would soon be waiting for her. Even if she would be back on time she knew she would be in a hurry anyway as she also would have to take a shower and change clothes before going to the Hardrock Hotel.
All Fivers was wearing that day were a grey short, a white tanktop and blue flipflops which had been the perfect day attire during the hot California day weather but now that night was falling she began to shiver and wished she had brought with her some pants and a sweater or jacket.
There were some cafetarias along the road as well as some Chinese and what seemed to be some Korean small eating places offering a range of exotic sounding beverages and side dishes. Fivers who also got a little hungry and couldn't resist the roasted beef barbecue smell that emerged from one of those places, opted for this one Korean restaurant named Pasadena.

Yet soon she started to regret to have entered this place as inside it appeared to be more crowded then it had appeared from the outside. There seemed to be some sort of longiline backroom filled with smoke and dubious male laughter. It also appeared that most of the restaurant was filled with Asian people who almost all had this particular Korean look i.e. big heads with small slit eyes. (lol)
Despite the somewhat lousy atmosphere, Fivers had been ordering a coffee and a small dish of kimchi which she was waiting for impatiently to arrive. She was looking at the ground checking for her flipflops to be sand free from the beach earlier that day, when she suddenly heard a voice directed at her. It wasn't the waiters' voice as this one was not high and pitched but rather low and not pitched at all. There was also a commanding undertone emanating from it that made her shiver and instinctively predict that this voice meant 'trouble'... Big trouble... (lol) She looked up. A tough Korean guy was standing next to her looking at her flipflops and her frightened face...

<Where are you from?> Korean guy
<I'm from China> Fivers
<Hell, no! we only want Koreans here!> Korean guy
Then all of a sudden 5 other Korean guys jumped out of the backroom looking at Fivers and forming a circle around her.
<Ha! let's learn that Chinese slut a lesson!> Korean guy 2
<Yeah let's gang rape her!> Korean guy 4
<Yeah I bet she has a tight pussy she looks like she never had sex!> Korean guy 3
<YEAH LET'S START!> all the guys together
<Ughhh pls noooo Pls don't rape me!! plsssss don't rape meeee! noooooooo> Fivers (crying) ()
<We won't take no for an answer! No means YES!> Korean guy 5

All of the Korean guys rounded up and jumped on Fivers in order to maintain her on the floor. One guy was holding her arms while another one had taken grip of her legs, still another one was holding her head in between his muscled arms. At the same time two other guys were taking Fivers' shorts off and looking at her panties..
<Let's see what underneath them!> they yelled.. And so it happened that they also took Fivers' panties off and savagely gang raped her.
Needless to say that those thugs didn't wear a condom and that semen flew in all directions around and in all orifices of Fivers exhausted body. (lol)
In the meantime the staff of the restaurant who at first had been hiding in the backroom - too afraid of the thugs' reactions towards them, had been calling the cops as they had been compelled by Fivers' astonishing screams, crying and crocodile tears.
The cops had not been there very fast, in fact it had taken a couple of hours before they eventually showed up and called an ambulance to take the terrified Fivers to the hospital and later on the mental hospital. (lol)
Needless to say Fivers will always remember this terrible incident as well as her friends Elena and Joelle.. All three still wonder what would have happened if Fivers had been at the Rehab Hardrock Hotel Party that night... Had she been hired as a cocktail waitress then? Nobody will ever know

The End


Newsflash:

Four men have been arrested

Summary: A Chinese American in L.A. ordered a coffee and a small dish of kimchi from a restaurant, and a Korean American approached her, asking her if she was Korean. She responded that she was Chinese, then when she was waiting for her order, the Korean thug rounded up a group of 5 Koreans and savagely gang raped her.. After the barbarous assault, the violent gang added insult to injury by then proceeding to destroy her panties.
The victim is called Fivers and was active on a forum (AF) her rape story will eventually be discussed there

EDIT: Efforts to track down at least two other suspects are continuing.

^ didn't know that those thugs luv to have rough sex with men as well...lol

From the way Fivers wrote the story, it sounded like it was her fantasy to be gang raped

Evidence: ".. Fivers' astonishing screams, crying and crocodile tears."
Astonishing screams??? Not agonizing, not screams of mercy, not pleas for help ... but astonishing???
Crying crocodile tears??? Not real tears???
Fiver didn't try to run away or fight back???

I'm sorry but the writing was loose and the narration was terrible
The story was just to flimsy to be called good.

On a scale of one to ten ... you get Fivers

I heard it's not uncommon for women to have rape fantasies lol

Yep ,some women want to be dominated.


Others want to be dominated by a particular person.

interesting story. did it really happen though? this kind of rmeinds me of the rape scene in orwell's 1984

I don't remember any rape in 1984.
I read that book 26 years ago, but I really don't think there is any rape.

Yeah man, I was thinking the same thing too. I remember Winston eventually got it on with Sophia(whom I've always imagined to resemble my Gr.10 math teacher). But both were yearning for the passionate exchange of bodily fluids.

As for the original story, as I must feel I must comment on it. Given my extensive research on psychoanalysis(NOT), I'd have to say. If cloudyski is a virgin, she probably wants her first time to be with another virgin. And has even gone as far as contemplating and playing out this hypothetical situation her heard over and over many a time. It has consumed her mind to the point that she had to write it down and share it, as to get it off her chest. A release, that if indeed her first time experience is not with another virgin, at least she had the dream. Her disappointment will be easier to bear.

If she is not a virgin, then she's just plain crazy. Putting so much emphasis on that one impending factor would lead one to believe that she may have had a traumatic first time experience.


As for Fivers, OMG DOUBLE RAINBOW ALL THE WAY ACROSS BUT SKY.
It's one thing to think about it, it's another thing to write it down. It's a completely different thing to write it down and not even realize how intense such an experience can be. I don't mean to come off as sounding like a lecturing parent, but I must say it again!

OMG DOUBLE RAINBOW ALL THE WAY ACROSS THE SKY

relax man, it is just fiction lol

nvm i take that back. i mean the sex scene. where the male lead goes to a prostitute

Yeah, I remember. And to gain further control over Human nature, the ruling Party was exploring ways of genetically eliminating the pleasure function.


Any other budding writers out there ?
Post your school essays and creative writing folks.

don't a guy need to be hard to have intercourse.
So he was having a wet dream when you (i mean she the woman in your story) walked in for him to be hard?

ahaha funnyass story, people and their fantasy